Paper A

WATCO coaching a city league soccer team on the fulfillment of a volunteer college student?

Claim: Coaching decreases the overall feeling of fulfillment of a volunteer college student. 

Reason: coaching increases your exposure to large amounts of unmet expectations and stress.

Audience: My audience is the Provo City Recreation Department, specifically the elementary athletics division.They are middle aged and enjoy organizing sports for youth.

The goal of the author was to persuade city employees to stop recruiting college students as volunteer coaches because it causes undo stress. This author failed to develop an understanding of the audience she was writing to. This caused a disconnect in the paper which caused the audience to loose interest early in the paper. The paper relied to heavily on pathos which failed to persuade again due to the fact that the author did not fully know her audience. The author's appeal to logos also failed to be effective persuasively because the logic she tried to appeal to did not agree with the audience.The argument also did not contain sufficient research to persuade the audience. The research was not the only think lacking however, the lack of response to the opposition greatly weakened the paper. The author also failed to elaborate on points that were relevant to the audience. While the points made were all valid they were poorly supported and as was previously stated lacked appeal to the target audience.This paper overall failed to be effective in the goal of persuading city employees to stop recruiting college students as volunteer coaches.